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The characters I have the most trouble with are one's who['re] terse.

Yeah. Especially if you rely heavily on dialog. In these two POV pieces, they two people see the same scene totally differently, and they could describe about them and what they thought of them with a different perspective. I had to watch their diction and humor didn't intersect.  I'm not sure really about reusing "long story" for both. Not sure about making him a bit of a "bimbo" either (and I use that word very advisedly), but it makes the point of how he perceives himself in his society.  It's fun to write, tho.