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 The gold standard that I reference as a baseline for how to write an exceptional supporting character in fiction, is Lieutenant Colonel Maes Hughes from Fullmetal Alchemist. Absolutely exceptional. 

Two decades after my initial reading of him, he’s still phenomenal.

Fullmetal Alchemist, the mature manga/anime, has a world set in the early 1900s, except where alchemy is real magic, at least for the few people who dare to practice it. Alchemy is hard to do and has a high price. There’s also a massive alchemical conspiracy involved in the government and military that runs the main country of the setting.

Lieutenant Colonel Maes Hughes is not an alchemist. He’s just a kind and hard-working 30-ish year old guy that is really good and experienced and at his job in military intelligence. He’s also great with throwing knives as his main hobby.

In the early arcs of the story, Hughes befriends as a semi-mentor the younger main alchemical protagonists (Ed and Al) and is already a close friend with another military colleague major supporting senior character (Colonel Mustang, who is a flashier military officer and alchemist). 

Hughes is incredibly friendly and positive, and sometimes serves as comic relief. The funny, chill guy. As all these heroes run around, he focuses on his work. And unlike all of them, he’s a family man; his wife and young daughter mean the world to him. He always wants to show everyone pictures of his 4-year old daughter; he’s just absolutely thrilled about his family.

But behind all the kindness, and correct obsession with his wife and daughter, he’s super smart. He’s a lieutenant colonel in military intelligence, after all. He’s not a genius or anything but basically he’s just highly competent professionally, socially, and ethically, and thus optimized his life well. He doesn’t pursue alchemy and so he doesn’t do all the magical things that some rare people do that can greatly exceed human capabilities in battles, but he’s great elsewhere.

In his military intelligence research, partially from talking to the protagonists, he figures out the entire main villain plot before anyone else does. Before all the protagonists and other supporting characters. He then tries to go to a private (non-surveilled) payphone to share that information with his close colleague Colonel Mustang, and is murdered in the process.

And that murder doesn’t go down smooth, since Maes isn’t a pushover. He gets attacked by a supernatural alchemical villain entity named Lust to stop him, and with his throwing knives he holds his own against her better than most humans would and manages to escape injured. And as he gets to the payphone, he is attacked by a second supernatural alchemical villain entity named Envy, who can transform into people. Envy transforms into a lower-ranking officer Hughes knows, but Hughes can tell it’s not really her from a minor detail, since he knows that officer well. So Envy transforms into Hughes’ wife. Since he adores his wife, that fucks him up even though he logically knows it’s not her. He hesitates at throwing a knife at his visual wife, and thus gets shot to death by Envy before he can relay the key information to Mustang and other heroes. He dies in the phone booth, seconds away from providing key information. He did everything right but was overwhelmed by the superior conspiracy. And yet his death left tiny clues.

The funeral scene is hardcore. Hughes’ wife is devastated, and his young daughter doesn’t even fully understand the concept of death yet. She cries and panics out loud at the funeral, wondering how her father is going to finish all his work while he’s in a box underground, which makes all the adult main and supporting characters absolutely die inside at how hard that is to hear.

Hughes gets post-humorously promoted two steps up to Brigadier General upon his death, by the key military leadership of the country who are behind the whole conspiracy. Colonel Mustang, who knows Hughes tried to contact him that night but doesn't know what about, devotes his entire focus for the rest of the story to figuring out what Hughes found and avenging his death. The protagonists (Ed and Al) are also devastated from it and keep him in mind.

The death of this supporting character sends arguably the biggest shockwave through the series in terms of emotion and plot. It's not a throwaway. It raises the stakes, gets all the main and semi-main characters dialed in, and he never gets reborn or anything like that. Hughes never comes back. He’s dead, survived by his wife and daughter, and his friends have to deal with that fact until the end of the series.

Few supporting character arcs hit harder than Maes Hughes, imo. Roughly two decades after first experiencing it, I’m still like, “damn.” That's one of those weeb generational impacts worth studying for fiction creators and appreciators.
https://youtu.be/h7QnAwJeJeg
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 This is awesome stuff 🧡 👍 
 Are you writing a fiction novel @LynAlden !? 
 Yes, for fun. I don’t know if I will publish it. 
 Well if it’s even half as quality as Broken Money then please do.

Side note, can I ask you a question about fractional reserve banking I’ve never seemed to be able to get straight? 
 can’t wait 
 In a world setting that has its versions of “supers”, just a human like Hughes is almost essential to provide a baseline of what a smart, dedicated normal person can do. His death, and the follow up (which was done so well as you said) was heartbreaking. ❤️‍🩹 
 Really appreciate reading your thoughts on fiction writing. Every new note makes me more hyped for your novel!  It’s gonna be something special. 
 This scene is one of the most emotional moments in the anime space (at least for me). Roy (boss and Hughes friend) tries to hide his tears and after all as a flame alchemist he is useless in rain. Incredible scene. 
https://youtu.be/s7HcPvTew_4?si=qSTq1N23Dve0JWKW 
 I always cracked up at Armstrong's emotional outbursts. 
 Amen. I never read the manga, but I did watch the show. He was my favorite character because he was, in so many ways, the person I want to be. I hated it when he died, but it made the story that much more enveloping. 
P.S. One of the things I hate the most in stories is good characters, (often they are the only decent people) killed for no good narrative reason. Just shock value; and even then often poorly done. 
 He’s kinda like a tragic Samwise Gamgee. 
 You have to be a special kind of psycho to not like him. I enjoyed the original more than the brotherhood arc, even though people say the brotherhood arc is more true to the original material.  
 Interesting contrast to Dune’s approach with Duncan Idaho. Idaho in the first few books is just a side character, over the course of the series he starts to play a more critical role. He is cloned/incarnated time and time again because people can count on him to do the right thing. By book six, Duncan demonstrates himself to be one of the greatest tacticians in the Dune Universe.

The revival card is used a lot in Sanderson’s Stormlight archives too. Jasnah, the assassin in white, etc. Its overuse becomes mundane.

Mae Hughes’s death is very unique in that regard, readers can actually feel the ripple effects of his death. The consequences of Mae’s assassination simmer across the entirety of the show. 
 My hidden dream is that someone like you write a better Mandibles-themed story. As much as that message is important, that narrative is boring as fuck.