His voice was so rhythmic β¦ Recounts his takings Working away on nature Splintering fragments Portioned off places, he moves Gathering memories Savoring his duty Gripping curvature Intensified focus sees One rhythmic change now Brings pleasure and pain Sitting in comfort Glistening traces of beads Allowing exploration Grinding down slowly Welcomes the changes, of men Symbiosis felt Warm liquids burst forth He laps up the nectar Sweetness of honey Abundance flows within - Queen Mother rests Oasis sleeps Her honeycomb now complete.
I don't think I've ever read any poetry that uses 5 or 7 syllables like you do... It's really really cool and also the poem is lovely! Feels like a lullaby.
Thanks so much π«‘ Been writing forever βΎοΈ Still no idea how to get back β¦ Wait thatβs untrue π€£ Into Well may Be Time to become Intoxicated Opening my lap Top Taken off or onβ¦ (Focus, weirdo) Old laps on top Nibbles at pieces Of swollen Apple π That I knew at age four Was my destiny Fated Fallen Or Broken
Love the way it starts 2-3-4-5, then had me laughing out loud with the (Focus, weirdo) part. And then thinking about my mindset when I was four. You've got a really awesome talent!!
THANK YOU π Truly. Just started writing again a few years ago. Itβs nice to know it is impactful. Humbled π«
Words will always have impact, but your words contain more than that... certain degrees of passion and witticisms are planted throughout. Really really nice! ππ₯°π«
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